the question else’s some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time to help the local community we believe this would benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole to what extent do you agree or disagree let me ask you a question dr. Amen what kind of essay is it what kind of essay for organist yes it’s a for the gayness essay due to air how many positions we have here yeah how many positions have how many opinions do we have here – pinions – opinions do to him what are they the first one that the benefit for teenagers to work for on without playing and work yes without anything yes and the other one and then what is the effect of this on community on social social relations I think so what I wanted to understand – a moment so that’s what I’m asking I’m asking or I say that people some people think that teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in their free time and this will help the individual and the community to what extent do you agree or disagree so the two companions in lr2 what are the first one that villagers yeah that teenagers should be required to do unpaid work in three free time do you know the community or teenagers shouldn’t be required to do unpaid work in their free time but if you so starting from the very beginning when you start brainstorming you have to work on brainstorming for the two sides okay okay so how will we start we are gonna start with the end luxury paragraph so before talking about the introductory paragraph may I ask you something have you asked yourself a question how can I make the topic sentence let me help you to make the topic sentence we’re freezing here I need an idea unfortunately it’s not paraphrasing doctor in this in this port here but try to get some words here like unpaid where like what unpaid work what’s on me full answer right yes yes that’s right so unpaid work here unpaid work here can lead you to the part of what of voluntary work right that’s why that’s how we can make a topic sentence so here I say voluntary work me definitely real put yes help the young women build their own personalities and explore the world around them in a more yeah in a more sorry its paragraph four yeah voluntary work is believed to be one of the most important factors that greatly greatly what contributes to the prosperity and the welfare of many communities and people’s worldwide okay so on till here doctors this is what now this is a topic sentence my question now is have I stated my position no even have I given any details no no I’m talking about what I’m talking about about voluntary work in general right I want you now to notice something notice the use of these believes to and that’s something we’re going to talk about later we’re here you have the word yeah yeah contributes to we had hear the word what yeah we have here the word yeah force parity that’s right so now we have various vocabulary right so so the first topic sentence we got voluntary word them how did we get voluntary word we got grant theory work through reading the question through analyzing in the question and we found sorry and here we found the word what we found the word yeah update I got voluntary word that’s here so yes now the second one will be thesis statement in the thesis statement will what will narrowing your topic and state your position yeah starting with what starting with the opposing beside to your own personal viewpoint but here if this means that if I’m gonna be with I’m gonna start with agonist if I’m gonna be against I’m gonna start with a positive point right look can you please read the first sentence here yeah this kind of where does not list top list this kind of work why didn’t I say voluntary work wide range of vocabulary why drink a prairie and in order to avoid repetition right yep gone please discard work yeah doesn’t have its merits especially for young teenagers stop please what does marriage mean married yeah there’s no this year do nudes here hair we started hell we started the sentence who start with what here and I was fool with for with the poster poetry you do to him what’s gonna be the second sentence go on please never seen a waiver however young men are not the obligation of right was disguised what of work right go on please yeah the thing let me have negative impact on both younger generation and their community so now here this means that I’m gonna be with or against us against right so let’s read the introductory paragraph again voluntary work is believed to be one of the most important factors that greatly contributes to the prosperity and welfare of many communities and people’s worldwide right topic sentence okay general topic sentence what’s our second step narrowing the topic okay this kind of work does have its merits especially for younger teenagers semicolon we are going to talk about it in the punctuation session however I see that young men are not to be obliged to practice the sky work the thing that we have negative impacts so it should be what here it should be that may have a negative impact on both young generations and what and their communities okay what does this mean here this means that we want against right so what’s it gonna be the second paragraph in the body it’s gonna be a paragraph for Organists for right yeah it’s gonna be a paragraph for yeah so I think you’re following me now right okay but a grass one foot mean as you see here in my except relation main idea one yeah so main idea one that I made in an hour brainstorming as I explained right and the topic sentence of this paragraph yes voluntary work may definitely help the argument build their own personalities and what and explore the world lit around them in a more comprehensive and what yeah well matter nice until now this is what this is a topic sentence this is the main idea of what of the first four paragraph you understand me so so in my brainstorming I’m gonna write what I’m gonna write here the young women build build the personals right so I’m gonna write here volunteer work me definitely help the young women build their own personalities and explore the world around them in a more comprehensive and global manner right okay what’s gonna be the second sentence yeah supporting one due to movement okay what is the first word here love creating illustrating this means that before moving to the first supporting detail one you should let you read there know that here you are gonna give more accept donation you can use illustrating you can use it specifically you can say namely you can say you know in other words you can say to o illustrate and this is your homework number two which is the study worth of transactions look at a minute and due to a are you still with me here yes okay illustrating they what does they refer to generation ranks it would be more more what liable liable to means subjected to normally liable to communicate with various types of what of people the thing that that what broadens their minds and what and enhance their communication skills force to operate and then I’m gonna write what now supporting retail to additionally so here the use of connecting word so the use of connecting where the here means that what that I’m gonna move to talk about another idea and that’s what I call what and that’s what I call fellow who over his okay additionally such voluntary activities so instead of repeating volunteering word here I say voluntary activities yes you can still hear me right such a voluntary activities me enable those young age groups notice the word year those young age groups in order not to repeat young generation lose young age groups to what to pray performing perform got some tasks and be subjected to to what certain situations that will in turn foster what’s foster support increase intellectual and what and social abilities in what and their later life stages and notes okay so what is them what is the first main idea here help young men build their own personalities and explore the world around them what is the first reporting detail one we start with illustrating and we said help them better communicate help them broaden their minds what is the other subducting detail the second support in the detail which is what which is yeah loose young age groups yeah therefore learn some tasks and be subjected to new situations will help them foster their intellectual and the social abilities and their later life stages okay so I want you now to come and notice newts what notes here this paragraph follow me for this paragraph here we have topic sentence right topic sentence in this topic sentence its general right here I have I have what explore its advanced world I have the word the comprehensive I have the word the global so now I have wide range of vocabulary right now I had the straighting I’m making use of connecting words or transition right okay here I have broke their minds I still use what I still use yeah vocabulary right okay enhance I still have I also still use what yeah vocabulary yeah additionally connecting word additionally connecting word okay yes look here yeah intellectual and the social also connecting word sorry the word advanced vocabulary the word what yeah the word that Foster poster okay here loose young aged in order to avoid repetition that’s here okay that will in turn I’m using a different sentence structure okay here so when I’m come when I come to correct myself I try to look at the lexical resources the cohesion and coherence the flow of ideas the use of connecting words the different use of sentence structure until now okay what’s gonna be the third paragraph it’s gonna be a paragraph again straight okay so look here yes in the paragraph against we are gonna do another thing which is what